My 10 year old cousin wrote this what do you think?
“No! Please! She just a ‘itte baby!” exclaimed Beatrice Irwin, new mother and step daughter of Lady Anne, the richest woman in all of Tumnan, the world of elves and other magical creatures.

Beatrice held her baby tight as she slid down the damp wall in her cottage just off of her step mother’s large estate. Beatrice was the child of an unacceptable love. Her father Jean, fell in love with a lady in waiting named Bella. And the night Beatrice was born Bella died. Her father soon after began to grow old and well, clueless and that’s when he married Anne and they had twins Eva and Ava. Her father died after Anne poisoned him while celebrating Eva and Ava’s third birthday.

“No I cannot allow you to keep this child” said Lady Anne with her nose high and her eyes staring at the baby. Lady Anne had to take this baby because she was the only one who had the same powers as her grandfather. These powers were to be able to control the movement of an object or person. With these powers you could stop a whole army with only one man.

“Give the child to me now!” yelled Lady Anne as she unhooked Beatrice finger which were holding the baby.
“No! Never, I can’t!” Yelled Beatrice. Lady Anne pulled out her rifle and shot Beatrice. Beatrice fell to the ground still holding her baby and died.

The baby started to cry because the wound on her mother was just above the baby and the blood was dribbling on her.

Lady Anne picked up the baby and handed to her lady in waiting Edna Gordon. Edna wrapped the baby in an old cloth and tied her to her back.

“Go into the Twilight Forest and kill the baby! Stop for no one!” ordered Lady Anne.
“Yes Lady Anne” answered Edna. Edna ran for miles. She went through the Main Square. She went by beggars dying in the street, children playing with sticks and stones, merchants selling things for unfair prices, and the Disbelievers singing the shame that Lady Anne given to Grote Dorp, the city.

By the time Edna got to the Twilight Forest her slippers had be worn down and the baby was crying louder than ever. Edna put the baby down on the ground and pulled out a bread knife, she raised the knife over the baby and began to shake. She could’t do it, she put the knife down and picked up the baby again. She held her close to her chest and hummed an old song her mother sang to her.

Creatures dark and bright
Every is light
No matter what we do
We will always stand together
Forever, and ever
Creatures dark and bright
Every is light
Life is good
Life is pure
Life is everything it should be
Creatures dark and bright
Every is light

Edna put down the baby and ripped of some of her skirt to make a blanket for the baby. Edna decided to keep the baby; she would bring her back to her little cottage and tell her husband she found this little baby abandoned in the forest.

She hasn’t finished writing it but do you think it is okay?
where did you get confused