http://armyblanket.com/blog/my-short-story-just-for-fun-any-comments-appreciated/ ArmyBlanket.com Mon, 14 Feb 2011 12:05:35 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 http://armyblanket.com/blog/my-short-story-just-for-fun-any-comments-appreciated/comment-page-1/#comment-882 Lynci Tue, 20 Oct 2009 21:00:52 +0000 http://armyblanket.com/blog/my-short-story-just-for-fun-any-comments-appreciated/#comment-882 If you wrote your story when you were a Freshman in high school, I think that it's really quite good. It's well-written, literate, grammatically correct, punctuated properly, with no glaring errors in spelling. Additionally, for a short story it is intriguing, exciting, and, as you have created the plot, believable. You appear to have knowledge of your subject. When I read, I always notice discrepancies or inconsistencies in the plot which will cause me to question its rationale or distract me from enjoying it; although your story might possibly have been unrealistic, you have written it so that it seems plausible. I don't know what your aspirations are for it, but I do think that it is better by far than most of what I've read posted here. If you wrote your story when you were a Freshman in high school, I think that it’s really quite good. It’s well-written, literate, grammatically correct, punctuated properly, with no glaring errors in spelling. Additionally, for a short story it is intriguing, exciting, and, as you have created the plot, believable. You appear to have knowledge of your subject. When I read, I always notice discrepancies or inconsistencies in the plot which will cause me to question its rationale or distract me from enjoying it; although your story might possibly have been unrealistic, you have written it so that it seems plausible. I don’t know what your aspirations are for it, but I do think that it is better by far than most of what I’ve read posted here.

]]> http://armyblanket.com/blog/my-short-story-just-for-fun-any-comments-appreciated/comment-page-1/#comment-881 blooi Sun, 18 Oct 2009 20:05:10 +0000 http://armyblanket.com/blog/my-short-story-just-for-fun-any-comments-appreciated/#comment-881 needs some improvement but overall great story needs some improvement but overall great story

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